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[ilo92]

Bonjour!!
Voilà, je dois rendre pour demain un devoir en anglais,je l'ai fais mais j'aurais besoin de quelqu'un pour me corriger mes fautes d'anglais, et si possible m'expliquer en 2 mots pourquoi ce n'est pas bon!
Je vous remercie de votre aide qui me sera utile!
Voila mon sujet, et mon travail :

In your opinion, what qualities and skills make a good PA ?


Nowadays, the role of the Personnal Assistant have move well.
From now on, she is often the right-hand man of the person whom it assits.
These evolution of the role of Personnal Assistant is due to development of new technologies, like computer or Internet.
Personnal Assistant is qualified much more and its responsabilities are more important.
Consequently, Personnal Assistant must own many skills.
She must speak many language, because she can to travel to its work.
She must know use of many software such as Word, Excel, Access or Power Point.
Personnal Assistant must also own many qualitties.
To be effective in its work, Personnal Assistant must be organized, and to know manage the priority.
Personnal Assistant must be discretion. Indeed, she detains many confidential information about firm.
It is significant that it is nice, smiling, with the people, because she conveys the image of the company.
Well of others qualities are necessary for to be a good Personnal Assistant such as the rigour, the autonomy and to know take a initiative.
But, to become Personnal Assistant, you must have experience and a knowledge of the world of the companny.

 

[Nessscafe]

Voila mon sujet, et mon travail :

In your opinion, which qualities and skills make a good PA ?


Nowadays, the role of the Personnal Assistant have moved well.

From now on, PAs are often the right-hand/arm ? man of the person (whom) they assit (tu devrais utiliser "they&quot.

This evolution of the role of Personnal Assistant is due to development of new technologies, like computers and Internet.

Personnals Assistants are more qualified and their responsabilities are more important.

Consequently, Personnals Assistants must own many skills.

They must speak many languages, because they can have to travel.

they must know how touse softwares such as Word, Excel, Access or Power Point. OU they must be savvy and computer literate.

Personnals Assistants must also own many qualities (répétition).

in order to be effective in its job, Personnals Assistants must be organized, and be able to manage their priorities.

Personnals Assistants must be discrete. Indeed, they detain many confidentials informations about their firm.

they have to be pleasant, polished and courteous with people, because they represent the company.

that's the mainqualities whichare necessary in order to be a good Personnal Assistant including the rigour, the autonomy and the initiative mind.

In conclusion, if you want to become a Personnal Assistant, you must have experience and a knowledge of the world of the companny.


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donc, voici mon avis. à confirmer. :wink2: (j'ai mis au pluriel, il y a des hommes qui sont PA aussi)

 

[ilo92]

Merci beaucoup pour ta reponse, je prend note !