Correction anglais oral svp

[missjo]

Bonjour,

Je passe mon BTS blanc mardi prochain et mon professeur ma demandé de faire une présentation en 2 minutes.

My name is OBERGFELL Johanne. I am 19 years old and I live in Haguenau. I like dancing and shopping.

I am on day-release Vocational training course as a Personal Assistant with the company Solutherm located in Schweighouse. This firm have 8 employee. The main activity of my firm is grossisten en chauffage.

In my firm I am only personal assistant. I am responsible for answering phone calls, sorting and dispatching the mail. I making all office work.

I am very glad to work in this company.

Si quelqu'un pourait me faire une correction.
Grand merci d'avance :biggrin:

 

[Angel of love]

Bonjour,

Je passe mon BTS blanc mardi prochain et mon professeur ma demandé de faire une présentation en 2 minutes.

My name is OBERGFELL Johanne. I am 19 years old and I live in Haguenau. I like dancing and shopping.

I am on day-release Vocational training course as a Personal Assistant with the company Solutherm located in Schweighouse. This firm have 8 employee. The main activity of my firm is grossisten en chauffage.

In my firm I am only personal assistant. I am responsible for answering phone calls, sorting and dispatching the mail. I making all office work.

I am very glad to work in this company.

Si quelqu'un pourait me faire une correction.
Grand merci d'avance :biggrin:

This firm has 8 employees

 

[hotaru]

Bonjour,

Je passe mon BTS blanc mardi prochain et mon professeur ma demandé de faire une présentation en 2 minutes.

My name is OBERGFELL Johanne. I am 19 years old and I live in Haguenau. I like dancing and shopping.

I am on day-release Vocational training course as a Personal Assistant with the company Solutherm located in Schweighouse. This firm have 8 employee. The main activity of my firm is grossisten en chauffage.

In my firm I am only personal assistant. I am responsible for answering phone calls, sorting and dispatching the mail. I making all office work.

I am very glad to work in this company.

Si quelqu'un pourait me faire une correction.
Grand merci d'avance  :biggrin:

I making all office work = I make all office work.
==> explication : présent simple car habitude ^^

I am very glad to work in this company : il faut que tu dises pourquoi :blush:

Et je crois qu'à la fin, il faut que dises ce que tu comptes faire après ton BTS.

Voilà pour moi, et bon courage pour ton oral ! :dacc: