Correction de work experience PLEASE!!

[bertyman]

Bonjour à tous les étudiants de ce forum patients sans doute d'en avoir finit avec les épreuves du BTS!!

Il ne me reste plus que 4 épreuves orales. Ainsi j'ai tenté (avec mes faibles capacités linguistiques...) de rédiger ma 2ème partie concernant le work experience. C'est assez succint mais bon si j'arrive à sortir ça ce sera deja pas mal :dacc: Alors si quelqu'un pouvait corriger mes fautes, je lui serai très reconnaissant! Pour info, je suis en BTS banque...

I start my work experience in October 2004 in 3 Bank Companies called “Crédit Mutuel de Bretagne”, “Banque Populaire de l’Ouest” and “Caisse d’Epargne de Bretagne” located at Finistère. I spent 12 weeks in banks during my 2 year training course. I was made to feel very welcome and I felt comfortable within the staff because they were dynamic skilled people. During my study, my tutors have fixed me activity with objectivies to reach.

I carried out many different activities in my firm: I welcomed the customers, I helped them with their withdrawals, I sorted the mail, I cashed the cheques... More, I selled bank products over the phone and throught a talk with costumers. For example, I tried to sell credit cards to cutomers having treasury problems. At the beginning, It’s very stressfull to be in relation with customers but I feel more and more comfortable progressively.

During my work experience I have learn many things, and I will recommend these firms to another student. To conclude, this experience has been extremly benefits for me and I know what I want to do next year. Furthermore, I will purchase my studies in departements of communication, marketing in publicity in a school called Sup de Pub located in Paris because I want to be creative in my job and especially I like human relations.

 

[Annabelle0412]

En espérant qu'il ne soit pas trop tard:

I started my training period in October 2004 in 3 different banks called “Crédit Mutuel de Bretagne”, “Banque Populaire de l’Ouest” and “Caisse d’Epargne de Bretagne” located in Finistère. I spent 12 weeks in banks during my 2 year training course. Everyone made me feel very welcomed and I felt comfortable with the staff because they were dynamic and skilled people. During my training period, my tutors put me in charge of many activities with objectives to reach.

I carried out many different activities in my firm: I welcomed the customers, I helped them with their withdrawals, I sorted out the mail, I cashed the checks... Moreover, I selled bank products over the phone and through a talk with costumers. For example, I tried to sell credit cards to cutomers having treasury problems. At the beginning, It was very stressful to be in contact with customers but I felt more and more comfortable as time went on.

During my work experience I have learn many things, and I will recommend these firms to another student. To conclude, this experience has been extremely benefic for me and I know what I want to do next year. Furthermore, I will purchase my studies in communication, marketing and publicity in a school called Sup de Pub located in Paris because I want to be creative in my job and especially because I like human contact.