correction de work experience

[demon95]

Bonjours quelqu'un aurait t'il la gentillesse de bien vouloir corriger mon work experience? je l'ai ecrit sur word et je peut vous l'envoyer par email.

merci

 

[Tatanana]

envoie le moi, je te le corrige avec plaisir :happy:

 

[Tatanana]

dans un premier temps, je remets ici ce que tu m'a envoyé, au cas où des personnes auraient le temps de répondre avant moi, j'ai d'ores et déjà corrigé les fautes d'orthogarphe :

My work placement took place for five weeks, from the twenty third of May to the twenty third fourth of June. I worked in a company called Leclerc. It’s Located in Moisselle. It is specialized in the retail sale of daily goods. I worked in the accounts department. My activities in the firm were accountancy. I had to record invoice and capture data I did work in the soft wear called Space X. I was made to feel very welcome and i felt comfortable within the staff because i worked with dynamic skilled people

During this internship, i did not encounter any particular difficulties.

As for my future plans, i will to take another degree in accounting

 

[L anglaise]

My work placement took place I was on work experience for five weeks, from the twenty third of May to the twenty third fourth (23 ou 24?) of June. I worked in for a company called Leclerc. It’s Located in Moisselle. It is specialized specialises in the retail sale of daily everyday goods. I worked in the accounts department. My activities in the firm were accountancy. I had to record invoice and capture data I did work in worked withthe soft wear softwarecalled Space X. I was made to feel very welcome and i felt comfortable within the staff because i worked with they were dynamic skilled people

During this internship, i did not encounter any particular difficulties.

As for my future plans, i will would like to take another degree in accounting

 

[catherine75]

I was on work experience for five weeks, from the twenty third of May to the twenty third fourth (23 ou 24?) of June. I worked for a company called Leclerc, located in Moisselle, specialised in the retail sale of everyday goods. I worked in the accounts department and my activities in the firm were related to accountancy: I recorded invoices and captured data. I worked with a software called Space X.
I was made to feel very welcome and I felt comfortable within the staff because they were dynamic skilled people

During this internship, i did not encounter any particular difficulties.

As for my future plans, i would like to take another degree in accounting

 

[demon95]

merci, sinon vous ne trouvez pas sa un peu court?

 

[catherine75]

salut,

personnellement, si, je trouve que c'est très succint. Tout dépend du but de ce texte. Il faudrait peut etre faire ressortir les avantages que tu as tiré de cette experience. Quels skills as -tu devellopé.
Quels difficultés as-tu rencontré et comment tu les as surmontées.... a part le fait que tu " did not encounter any particular difficulties", y'a peut etre eu des points sur lesquels tu avais des difficultés et le stage t'as permis de developpé des nouvelles compétences...?

Je serais d'avis de broder un peu plus. Si tu as besoin je suis à ta dispo pour correction / avis !

bon courage