petite vérification

[Littlestormy]

My name is Katarina Smith, Personal Assistant to the Director of Human Ressources of Now Wear International, a clothing retailer knowing as the best seller on women sportswear. I have read an interview you made in “Newsweek” last month about your pratice on equal opportunities policies in an international context.

We would be most grateful to invite you to make a lecture about this subject for managers of our company. We would enjoy hearing about in Paris.

The date set for the meeting is 24 March 2007 at 3 pm. Travel and hosting arrangements are being handled by the company agency.

Thank you in advance for your coming and we hope you will be able to respond to this invitation.

Qu'en pensez-vous

 

[Littlestormy]

bump :cry:

Personne ne veut me donner son avis ?

 

[liloone]

C'est pas que je veux pas ... mais je suis nulle en anglais .. je te serai d'aucune utilité :embarassed:

 

[Mykle]

My name is Katarina Smith, Personal Assistant to the Director of Human Ressources of Now Wear International, a clothing retailer knowing as the best seller on women sportswear. I rode an interview you made in “Newsweek” last month about your pratice on equal opportunities policies in an international context.

We would be really grateful to invite you for making a lecture about this subject for managers of our company. We would enjoy hearing about in Paris. Que veux-tu dire ?

The date set for the meeting is 24th of March 2007 at 3 pm. Travel and hosting arrangements will be handle by the company agency.

Thank you in advance for your coming and we hope you will be able to respond to this invitation.
Je suis persuadé qu'il y a une meilleure tournure pour dire cela, mais je ne suis pas calé en matière de politesse, surtout lorsque c'est professionnel. En revanche, tu pourrais rajouter à la fin quelque chose comme "Sincerely yours" ou "Yours faithfully".

Je t'ai corrigé comme je pensais être le mieux. J'espère ne pas être le seul à t'aider, car la rédaction d'une lettre dans le domaine professionnel, je n'y connais pas grand chose....! S'il y avait une AD dans le coin...^^

 

[Nessscafe]

La premiere chose qui me choque... I rode ???????????????????????? ascompris; ascompris; ascompris;

My name is Katarina Smith, Personal Assistant to the Director of Human Ressources of Now Wear International. We are a clothing retailer knowing as the best seller on women sportswear. I have read the interview you made in “Newsweek” last month about your pratice on equal opportunities policies in an international context.

We would be most grateful to invite you to make a lecture about this subject for our managers. It would be a pleasure to see you in Paris.

The date set for the meeting is March, 24th 2007 at 3 pm. Travel and hosting arrangements are being handled by the company agency.

We look forward to hearing from you very soon.

Sincerely yours,

xxxx

j ai fait quelques petites modifs. tu as la consigne en francais ?

par contre il faut changer ton intro, parce que c est comme en francais, soit tu utilises JE pour toute la lettre, soit NOUS. mais pas les deux.

 

[Littlestormy]

oki merci pour les conseil

pour le verbe "to read", il me semble que c'est "to read, read, read" et non "rode" qui est le participe passé du verbe "to ride"

 

[Nessscafe]

oki merci pour les conseil

pour le verbe "to read", il me semble que c'est "to read, read, read" et non "rode" qui est le participe passé du verbe "to ride"

exactement !!!!

 

[Mykle]

+1 autant pour moi !!!! Pfouah, ça, ça veut dire "revois tes verbes irréguliers" :wink2:

Merci.