Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger mon texte???

[RallyeGirl74]

Il doit y avoir pas mal de fautes...

This article written by Steve Zwick is extract from the « Time » newspaper dated 21st May 2001.
It deals about the logo which represents the objects which can be recycled and about it inventor company : DSD. DSD hold the monopoly on the recycling market.

Some positive points can be noted.
The DSD Green Dot invention is a real success in the recycling business and it is very identifiable thanks to it colours and form. It allows packing carrying this logo could be recycled easily without having to carry out a sorting as a preliminary. For the consumers, it is became an environment symbol. The money perceived by the company whose taking this logo is used to finance others recycling actions.

However there are some negative points.
The Green Dot generated a bad monopoly runs in Europe and the principal cause which was defended now became a race to the money and the monopoly across the world.


According to me, the step of DSD was a strong point for the safeguard environment fight. However this fight don’t have to become a financial battle between the industrialists and should only touch the subject of ecology


Merci

 

[thonon74]

Ceci n'est qu'une proposition, il est minuit passé, j ai les yeux qui piquent et pas de dico. J suis pas un bon en anglais donc j ai surement laisser des fautes...

This article written by Steve Zwick the 21st of May 2001 is extracted from the « Time »
It deals about DSD, the leader of the recycling market and its activity

What is positive is that the DSD Green Dot invention is a real success in the recycling business. Indeed it is very identifiable thanks to it colours and form. Moreover packings carrying this logo could be recycled easily without having to carry out a sorting as a preliminary. For consumers, it is became an environment symbol. The money perceived by companies using this logo is used to finance others recycling actions.

However it's important to say that the Green Dot generate a bad monopoly all over the Europe. The beginnig good intentions have turned in a race for money.


According to me, the step of DSD was a strong point in the fight for the environment safeguard. However the capitalism has instaured a battle for competitiveness between the industrialists and has changed an ecological project into a sector of trade

 

[9millimetres]

Il doit y avoir pas mal de fautes...

This article written by Steve Zwick, is an extract from the « Time » newspaper published the May 21st, in 2001.
It deals with about the logo that represents the objects which can be recycled and about it inventor company such as DSD which, holds the monopoly on the recycling market.

Some positive points can be noted.
For the consumers, it became an environment symbol. The money perceived by the company is useful for financing others recycling actions.

Nevertheless, there are drawbacks
The Green Dot provided by the company has turned the activity into a charity.

According to me, the step of DSD was a strong point for the safeguard environment fight. However, this fight do not have to become a business battle between the industrialists. Indeed, it should only be about how to preserve the environment.


Merci

I'm sorry. I didn't really quite get some sentences from your essay. I rewrote some. But, to boost your chance of getting goods marks, you should write one sentence for one idea. Otherwise, it will be too confused. I hope it ain't too late. If you have others essays which, have to be checked let me know. One more thing. You can, of course say, "I don't" but You have to write "I do not". See ya

 

[sekhmet278]

This article was written by Steve Zwick. It is extracted from the « Time » newspaper dated on 21st May 2001.
It deals with about the logo which represents the objects which can be recycled and about it inventor company : DSD. DSD hold the monopoly on the recycling market.

je ne peux t'aider que pour ça  :blush:

 

[biglittletiny]

This article written by Steve Zwick, is an extract from the « Time » newspaper published on May the 21st, in 2001.
It deals with the logos symbolising recyclable items and about the compnay who invented them, DSD which, holds the monopoly on the recycling market.

Some positive points can be noticed such as :
For the consumers, it (quoi?) became an environment symbol. The money earned by the company is useful for financing other recycling actions.

Nevertheless, there are some drawbacks such as :
The Green Dot provided by the company has turned the production into a charity action.

According to me, the step ( que veux tu dire ?) of DSD was a strong point for the safeguard environment fight. However, this fight does not have to become a business battle between industrials. Indeed, it should only be about how to preserve environment.

J'ai apporté quelques corrections à la version de 9mm. Merci de donner les reponses au questions. comme ça je pourrai peut être améliorer encore un peu.
bon courage.

 

[sekhmet278]

This article written by Steve Zwick,

tu m'as mis un doute, ce n'est pas was written ? car written tout seul, ça me choque où j'ai zappé un truc ascompris;

 

[biglittletiny]

non parceque le verbe est apres la virgule.

l'article ecrit par peter X, est Un extrait de ..

tu ne dis pas, l'article est ecrit par peter zwick est un extrait.. c'est là qu'il ya pb

 

[sekhmet278]

merci, j'apprends quelque chose... autant pour moi :blush:

 

[biglittletiny]

De plus : It is extracted

Signifie : c'est extrait de (dans le sens industriel du terme.) comme, le charbon est extrait de la mine.

Aussi il est plus convenable de dire is an extract of c'est un extrait de

 

[inkoo]

I'm sorry. I didn't really quite get some sentences from your essay. I rewrote some. But, to boost your chance of getting goods marks, you should write one sentence for one idea. Otherwise, it will be too confused. I hope it ain't too late. If you have others essays which, have to be checked let me know. One more thing. You can, of course say, "I don't" but You have to write "I do not". See ya

Hum... N'aurais-je pas appris en 6ème que les adjectifs anglais ne s'accordent jamais? Non? :arrow2:

 

[biglittletiny]

Hum... N'aurais-je pas appris en 6ème que les adjectifs anglais ne s'accordent jamais? Non? :arrow2:

LOL en effet !! Les adjectifs ne s'accordent jamais en anglais.

 

[9millimetres]

LOL en effet !! Les adjectifs ne s'accordent jamais en anglais.

You both right, sorry. Thanks for having corrected my language. Anyway, I think now the essay has been submited. I hope she held a good grade.

 

[catherine75]

Salut,

Tout le monde sait que the Time est un journal, donc inutile de rajouter Newspaper.
Par ailleurs, pour la date, evite le IN avant l'année..

 

[9millimetres]

Ceci n'est qu'une proposition, il est minuit passé, j ai les yeux qui piquent et pas de dico. J suis pas un bon en anglais donc j ai surement laisser des fautes...

This article, written by Steve Zwick the 21st of May 2001, is extracted from the « Time »
It deals about DSD, the leader of the recycling market and its activity

What is positive is that the DSD Green Dot invention is a real success in the recycling business. It ain't english. Indeed it is very identifiable thanks to it colour and form. Moreover packings carrying this logo could be recycled easily without having to carry out a sorting as a preliminary. For consumers, it is became an environment symbol. The money earned by companies using this logo, is useful to finance others recycling actions.

However it's important to say that the Green Dot provides a bad monopoly all over the Europe. The good intentions have turned into a race for money.


According to me, the step of DSD was a strong point in the fight for the environment safeguard. However the capitalism has instaured a battle for competitiveness between the industrialists and has changed an ecological project into a sector of trade

I got more or less what the topic is about. I've corrected some sentences. I think, I have already corrected you, haven't I?

 

[catherine75]

This article, written by Steve Zwick on May 21st 2001, is extracted from the « Time »


ça sera mieux