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Un écrit oral hmmm

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Bonjour à tous, voila j'ai rédigé l'oral que je vais présenter sur mes stages, je suis sur qu'il est rempli de fautes. Si quelqu'un pouvais m'aider à les corriger sa serait cool :biggrin:

Bonjour voici le texte que j'ai re re re re re modifié pour atteindre la perfection dans une centaine d'année mdr


During the third year of my formation, I completed my third placement in an estate agent's. I began it on November the twentieth two thousand and six, to finish on November the twenty second two thousand and six. This training session lasted four weeks. It is a small firm made up of five estate agents, one management assistant, and the manager.

During my first week, I met the various staff members. I observed the organisation of the firm. My placement officer explained to me what I would be doing on a daily basis. I carried out various tasks :
- I performed a lot of payment adjustments that have been sent to the tenants.
- Sometimes when the assistant was out of the office and I was in charge of the reception, I answered the phone to give information and wrote a lot of letters send to the tenants
- I studied the competitors to situate the firm among the competition
Contrary to the other training course I was never alone in this firm. That is to say, I couldn’t work independently but there was always somebody who could help me.

Before this third training session, I realized two other placement, the first one in a driving school where I was constantly alone all the time. But the advantage is that I was always at the contact of the client. The second training was realized in a small business that sells art products of table. It was the less interesting of all because my placement officer do not give me his confidence.
The last placement was very interesting, it allowed me to discover the work of a management assistant in an estate agent’s that I have never seen in my other training. I think that I would like to work in this sector in a few years. I was able to put into practise what I have been learning in school. However, I have been disappointed because the director has not given me his trust.

Merci premièrement d'être allé jusqu'au bout et deuxièmement de ne pas se moquer lol :laugh:
 
a2line12 link=topic=55477.msg575046#msg575046 date=1178099882 a dit:
Bonjour à tous, voila j'ai rédigé l'oral que je vais présenter sur mes stages, je suis sur qu'il est rempli de fautes. Si quelqu'un pouvais m'aider à les corriger sa serait cool  :biggrin:

Bonjour voici le texte que j'ai re re re re re modifié pour atteindre la perfection dans une centaine d'année mdr


During the third year of my formation, I completed my third placement in an estate agent's. I began it on November the twentieth two thousand and six, to finish IT on November the twenty second two thousand and six. This training session lasted four weeks. It is a small firm made up of five estate agents, one management assistant, and the manager.

:fleche: Y'a pas une légère erreur là ? Si tu as commencé ton stage le 20 novembre et que tu l'as fini le 22 novembre -soit 2 jours plus tard- il ne peut pas avoir duré 4 semaines.

During THE first week, I met the various staff members. I observed the organisation of the firm. My placement officer explained to me what I would be doing on a daily basis. I carried out various tasks :
- I performed a lot of payment adjustments that have been sent to the tenants.
- Sometimes when the assistant was out of the office and I was in charge of the reception, I answered the phone to give information and wrote a lot of letters senT to the tenants
- I studied the competitors to situate the firm among the competition
Contrary to the other training course I was never alone in this firm. That is to say, I couldn’t work independently but there was always somebody who could help me. :fleche: Pourquoi ne mets-tu pas cela en conclusion de ton exposé ?

Before this third training session, I realized two other placementS, the first one took place in a driving school where I was constantly alone all the time. But the advantage is that I was always at the contact of the client.  The second one took place in a small business that sells art products of  table. It was the less interesting of all because my placement officer did not give me his confidence. 
The last placement was very interesting, it allowed me to discover the work of a management assistant in an estate agent’s that I have never seen in my other workplacements. I think that I would like to work in this sector in a few years. I was able to put into practise what I have been learning in school. However, I have been disappointed because the director has not given me his trust.

Merci premièrement d'être allé jusqu'au bout et deuxièmement de ne pas se moquer lol  :laugh:
 
Merci beaucoup :biggrin: pour la date oui c'est un petit bug de ma part en tout cas je te remercie vraiment :aplause: :dacc:
 
THERE YOU GO :

I completed my last placement in an estate agency in the third year of my training. I started on November the twentieth two thousand and six, and it ended on November the twenty second two thousand and six. This training session lasted four weeks. It is a small firm made up of five estate agents, a management assistant and the manager.

During the first week, I met the staff members. I observed/analyzed the organisation of the firm. My placement officer explained to me what I would be doing on a daily basis. I carried out various tasks :

- I performed a lot of payment adjustments that have been sent to the tenants.
- Sometimes when the assistant was out of the office and I was in charge of the reception, I had to answer the phone to give information and I wrote many letters to the tenants
- I studied the competitors to situate the firm among the competition // I analyzed the competition to situate the firm on the market.
Contrary to the other training period I was never left on my own in this firm. That is to say, I couldn’t work independently but there was always somebody who could help me.

Before this third training session, I made two other placements, the first one in a driving center where I was constantly alone. But the advantage is that I was always in contact with the client/customer. I made the 2nd training in a small business that sells dining artistic products (not sure). It was the less interesting of all because my placement officer did not trust me.
The last placement was very interesting, it allowed me to discover the work of a management assistant in an estate agency which is something I never got to discover in my other trainings. I think that I would like to work in this field in a few years. I was able to experiment what I had been learning in school. However, I have been disappointed because the director would not trust me.
 
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